W.A.L.T: Use 'show not tell'
This week in writing we have been learning to use show not tell in our writing. We write to imply and read to infer. This week our task was to write a piece of writing abut a feeling that anyone could have and use show not tell to describe this feeling. This is my writing of show not tell, what did you infer from reading my writing?
Something I enjoyed was coming up with a setting and a feeling, something I did well was and something I could do better next time would be to go into more detail.
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I stumbled across the finish line, I could barely move; my limbs were like jelly, my face was covered in sweat and my heart was pounding so fast it was shaking my whole body. As I slowly put one foot in front of the other I found a place to lie down and rest.
Hi Siobhan,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your little show not tell. I liked how you said "My limbs were like jelly". A feeling I could infer from your writing exhausted or nervous. Next time you could try to add more sentences and go into a lot more detail. Besides that, I think your writing is amazing. Keep it up. :)
- Ysabel
Hi Ysabel,
DeleteThank you for commenting and giving me feedback, I will make sure next time I will add more writing and go into more detail to make it more interesting for the readers. You were right the feeling I was writing about was exhausted.
Thank you once again.
Siobhan.