Goldilocks
Once upon a time there was a young girl named Goldilocks, she was the only girl on this planet who was stinky she was so stinky she had dirty flies around her.
About one year ago her parents kicked Goldilocks out of the house because she couldn't control her stinky smell. One day Goldilocks was wondering about in the forest, she was as tired as a sloth and she was going to give up walking because she had lost so much of her energy, bot then suddenly out of nowhere a whole family of bears came walking towards Goldilocks. So she quickly shot behind a large tree, then finally she got out of her hiding spot and kept walking until she came across a cottage, Goldilocks was so impolite some she just walked in.
Goldilocks found some porridge lying on the table and straight away took notice of baby bear’s one and scoffed it right up. In the sunlight that was shining through the window, you saw her eyes glimmering as she spotted a chair that looked very comfortable and just right, the next thing you knew Goldilocks was lying on the ground with broken pieces of baby bear’s chair scattered around her. ( Everyone knew what that meant that she was not right for baby bears chair even though it looked just right in Goldilocks eyes )
Once Goldilocks had finished eating and breaking a chair she decided to go up stairs and have a nap in one of the beds, as she was going up the stairs she heard footsteps coming from down stairs, she froze for a minute it was the bears so Goldilocks ran back downstairs, past the bears and out the door and into a pond to wash of her dirtiness. The bears looked with rage in their eyes while tried to put baby bear's chair back to normal. Goldilocks came home and gave her parents a big hug because she is now all clean. Goldilocks is happy but the bears decided not to leave their house again.
Hi Siobhan,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story about Goldilocks.
Also I agree with you, you could've put more descrptive words in your story.
But great effort in your work.