W.A.L.T Write a flashback from a different perspective and use show not tell.
The book is called "The Anzac Puppy" by Peter Millett and Trish Bowles. I enjoyed doing this because you got to be that person and you used your imagination during this, Next time I will make sure I use punctuation and make the sentences more shorter.
As I come outside I am sweating like mad, it was as if I was in a oven. All that I heard were some annoying noises boom, crash and bang coming from the explosions.
Running, hiding and shaking came the soldiers. When I saw them I felt some tears dropping from my cheek but then I feel some saliva on my face I realise it’s Freda trying to cheer me up. Freda is a good dog. She makes all the rats scuttle away. I am so lucky to have Freda. I feel so comforted now.
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